for the short story i wrote a horror and tried to focus on lexis and grammar for the main linguistic methods as they are the main choices for a story.
i wrote about a man suffering from horrible hallucinations and ends up going crazy. this story is mainly for entertainment for people 15 and above.
lexis-i used a lot of descriptive words to add empthasis to the story, especially at the parts that were supposed to build fear to add tension to these certain parts, also i use violent verbs which fit in with the genre of the story.
grammar-i used a lot of speech in this short story as the main focus is for the story to be like a long monologue of his night of terror and it also cretaes a sense of conversation between the writer and the reader, which could be synthetic personalisation.
discourse structure-i set out the story straight down the page as its easy to read and the title at the far top to show what the strory's called.
graphology-i used no pictures but i made the title bigger and bold so it stands out and catches peoples eye
pragmatics-i use words that associate with the feeling of fear or being scared and i also use words to imply insanity but dont outright put it.
semantics-i used certain words and phrases to show how scared the character in the story was. i also used words that all assocciated with the feeling of insanity like illness and doctor.
Brandon, I can see that you are trying to meet deadlines... But this is not a commentary. You need to redo this, and then decide which piece you want to complete. We can discuss this in the lesson. I also look forward to reading your editorial plan.
ReplyDeleteThank you for adding some more comments to your work. You are beginning to describe the choices you have made, but it is not really moving beyond superficial. You need to take a much more analytical and systematic approach... Focus on specific examples. We can compare your commentary with some others, and then you can have another go,
ReplyDeleteI look forward to receiving your editorial plan ASAP.
ReplyDeleteYou are being much more systematic in your approach here Brandon. However, I trust you would not write an essay in note form like this, and our commentary should be more like an essay in continuos prose, analysing aspects of your work, using the points you have made. Try taking a look at some of the other students' commentaries, to see how they compare.
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